Crimson Whisper by FallenAngel

[FallenAngel]

Here's a poem I wrote a while back:

In twilight’s shroud, beneath moon’s glow,
Where shadows kiss and embers low,
A silver whisper slides through night,
A yearning thirst, an endless flight.

Fangs trace veins with gentle grace,
A crimson bloom on alabaster lace,
The heartbeat fades in tender grip,
Life’s pulse surrenders, sip by sip.

Eternity calls in silence deep,
Where mortal dreams dissolve in sleep,
The night entwines with dark embrace,
A kiss eternal, love’s last trace.

What do you all think?

 

[Schschl]

I love that there's a coherent story and you managed to keep the meter and make it rhyme while being overall beautifully written

 

[FallenAngel]

I love that there's a coherent story and you managed to keep the meter and make it rhyme while being overall beautifully written

Aw thank you darling

 

[inkycapnip]

gentle grace and alabaster lace is so satisfying, the imagery in this is gorgeous, and your structural skills are hella cool

 

[FallenAngel]

gentle grace and alabaster lace is so satisfying, the imagery in this is gorgeous, and your structural skills are hella cool

Thanks doll!